NOTE: Each correction is justified by a section in the 5.2 -- English Usage section of the CS5014 course notes.

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/QNM's (Queueing Network Models)/Queueing Network Models (QNMs)/
    [See 4.1 and 5.1]
OPTIONAL:  /Abrams'/Abrams's/  [See 5.1]

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/Kleinrocks/Kleinrock's/  [See 5.1]
/contain/contains/  [See 3.6.1]

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/wait/waits/  [See 3.6.  Note that "set" (not "customers") is the
              subject of "waits".]

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/Customers waiting for a bus./customers waiting for a bus;/  [See 4.4]

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/Packets awaiting transmission in a network./packets awaiting
transmission in a network; or/  [Eliminates fragment:  See 3.2 and 4.4]

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/Jobs/jobs/  [See 4.4]

Figure:
Move to page 2, after reference in body text.

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/one/1/  [See 4.5]
Better:/showed/shows/  [See 6.1]
Best:  /showed/contains/  [See 6.8]

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/how much time/the time that/  [See 4.3]
  [Note:  achieves parallelism between "the ... discipline, the time, and a  
  ...variable]
/so---called/so-called/  [See 5.4]

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/[IAT]/(IAT)/  [See 5.6, 5.7]
Better: /customer that/customer, that/  [See 5.3.2]
Best:   /customer that/customer/        ["Avoid needless words"]

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/is called the service time/(the service time)/  [4.3, "Avoid needless words"]
  [Note:  achieves parallelism between "(the so-called interarrival time 
  (IAT))" and "(the service time)".]  
/queue which/queue, which/  [See 5.3.2]

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/servers if/servers, if/  [See 5.3.2]

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/queue in a line/queue/  [Eliminates redundant words.]

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/queue consider/queue, consider/  [See 5.3.1]

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/"What/What/  [See 5.3.5]
/transmission"./transmission?/  [See 5.3.5]

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/choice/choose/  [See 6.1]
/size. (ie we/size (e.g., we/  [See 5.3.2; also 5.3.2 explains
                               e.g. vs. i.e.]

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/mean.)  We/mean).  We/  [See 5.3.2]

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/; and the/; the/  [See 5.8 and 5.3.3]
[or: /; and the/, and the/]

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/QT [queueing theory]/queueing theory (QT)/  [See 5.6 and 5.7]

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/in the queue/in a queue/  [Distinguish indefinite and definite articles.]

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/formulas/formula/  [Article [i.e., "a"] and noun must agree in number.]

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/exponential/exponentially/  [See 3.4]

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/.  $\rho$/.  Thus $\rho$/  [Note:  Accept any legal correction in
which $\rho$ does not start a sentence.]

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Add a period to the end of the formula.

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/0.5 which/0.5, which/  
/queue.  Thus/queue, then/  [Eliminate fragment -- See 3.2]
  [Note:  Any solution to eliminate the fragment ending in "queue." is
  o.k.]

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/0.25 which/0.25, which/  [See 5.3.2]

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/1/2, this/1/2; this/  [Eliminate comma splice -- See 3.3
[or /1/2, this tells/1/2, telling/  [See 3.3 (comma splice)]

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/is according to equation (1)/is, according to equation (1),/  [See 5.3.2]

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EITHER
  /bytes then/bytes, then/  [See 4.5]
OR
  /then on the average/then, on the average,/

/Either 2 or 4/A size that is either two or four/
  [Note:  Any correction that avoids the fragment and changes 2 or 4 to
  words is acceptable.]

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/are/is/  [See 3.6.1]
/-/--/
/me/me./  ["Me" is correct case of apposition - see 3.5 and 3.5.2]